A Picture I Took By My Bus Stop (I will have to look up the name)

A Picture I Took By My Bus Stop (I will have to look up the name)
I think these are Clematis (but don't quote me!) - This picture was taken by my bus stop

Tuesday, April 12, 2011

Inner Dialogue - Rewritten A Much better Version I hope


Inner Dialogue

The how and why have been
you've toiled through
many sleepless nights
you've even had a dream
or a nightmare or two
but your masterpiece is done
you're sure of it, 
Oh the joy
until you read it
and with a sober eye
you wonder just what were
you thinking? 

Oh yeah? Oh really?  
You make me
laugh, you really do
you are so deluded,
you are no writer 
you are just a hack.

Face it,
it has to end here.
No use living in dreams.
But no, you shout

it just needs an edit or two, 
I'll be more judicious
and move a sentence here
and where I've
said too much, 
I'll keep it simple,
I swear
I'll remove this adverb
one adjective will do instead of two!

But eventually you must review
you know you do,
postponing it as long as possible,
until it cannot be avoided.
"Buck up"  you tell yourself,
And with baited breath
you either melt in ecstasy 
or despair.

You chose to write, 
to live this life
inhabiting nebulous 
unspoken worlds
wavering between 
the here and now
your words a record
of the endless struggle
to reach the essence of things.

© copyright Doradeecee, 2011


  1. Nice, Dora. I must have written a dozen of these sort of poems.

    Good luck!

  2. Thanks - I have a feeling I will be rewriting this again :)